Toony's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Rolus in the Outback]

thank you so much!!!

Player0Gaming responds:

np, thanks for making a neat game! looking forward to the next update

[THE SPACE GIRL ch.00 part 3]

it reads right to left but you have to account for the fact that people read top to bottom as well. some speech bubbles on the left are higher than the one im supposed to start reading with on the right.

also never put a full ass paragraph in one speech bubble, people arent gonna read it
a lore dump can happen but it needs to be broken up into multiple drawings with multiple panels to make it interesting to read

AetherionArt responds:

yeh pretty much.

[THE SPACE GIRL ch.00 part 1]

i think it's weird that it reads right > left like a manga but one of the first actions is an object flying in from the left and hitting our subject on the right. that really threw me off.

ur good at poses and anatomy but you need to work on making panels flow into each other better. also the panels are hardly ever instantly-legible. it takes me a minute, as if my eyes are adjusting, to parse what some of the drawings are. maybe it's the lack of tonal contrast (a lot of panels are purely white in part 2), but i also think it's some of the drawings themselves.

you're going a little too imaishi too quickly, it's ok to have some panels have less foreshortening and just be like. a normal thing.

anyway i'm saying all of this bc it's REALLY hard to get people to take time out of their day to read a comic, so if you want people to keep reading, legibility is the most important thing. some of your words come too close to the speech bubbles also and pls don't have anything cover them.

i like her booty butt also

[la linea de ciro]

whyd he kiss a baby

Temorinki responds:

That's actually a 40 year old guy's Sona from the well known Chilean band gufi :nerd emoji: :pointing up emoji:

[Thank you, Charles!]

is charles your nephew

[killa]

honestly kiddbrute vibes

[i miss him]

i miss him too...

[PICO DAY 2023 (again!)]

your process i scrazy

FunSubs responds:

whar

[Happy Pico Day 2023]

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